edited script

This is what I've changed so far. If anyone happens to read this before Wednesday, please give me an opinion! I'm going to keep working on it, but any advice would be greatly appreciated!


Girl - in her twenties, wearing a light jacket and sweatpants with hair pulled back.

INT. APARTMENT LIVING ROOM- EARLY MORNING
A light comes on in the bedroom
We see her packing and picking up her luggage

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EXT. IN THE CAR - SUNRISE
We see the girl driving and the changing scenery
She travels from city to country, from tight to more open space

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EXT. CITY - EARLY EVENING
We see the sunset as she drives through the town, historic and spacious

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EXT. PARENT'S HOUSE - SUNSET
She pulls up to her parent's large, white house

EXT. PARENT'S HOUSE - SUNSET - FLASHBACK
Her parent's greet her.

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EXT. PARENT'S HOUSE - SUNSET - PRESENT DAY
She gets out of the car alone and stands for a second, regarding the empty house.

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INT. PARENT'S HOUSE - EVENING - FLASHBACK
She goes into the kitchen, hearing her mother's voice indistinctly

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INT. KITCHEN - EVENING - PRESENT DAY
We see her walking into the kitchen alone. She sets her bags down and turns some lights on. She goes up to the fridge and sees a note. She picks it up:
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Have all the food you want, don't forget to take the birds out.
Much love,
Mom and Dad

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She sets it on the counter and looks in the fridge. She pulls out a container of leftovers, smells it, sighs, then sets it back.

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INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT
We see her walking into the room and hear birds chirping. Cut to her regarding the birds. She looks at the birds and opens one of the cages. The bird bites her. She closes it quickly.

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INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT
She looks around the room, holding her luggage. She sets her luggage down and sits on the bed. She sits with her arms and legs tight together, looking around the room. CU: We see her eyes shifting in thought.

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INT. CHURCH - DAY
GIRL- Now wearing off-white dress
We hear her parents talking indistinctly while watching her sitting calmly.

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INT. CHURCH - DAY - FLASHBACK
Parents and girl in church attire
We see her parents sitting in a white pew in the church, we hear the girl laughing softly as her parents talk quietly.

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INT. CHURCH - DAY - PRESENT DAY
We see her wandering through the church looking at the stained glass windows. She stares at an imposing image of Jesus in one of the windows, then backs up. She opens the front doors of the church to bright sunlight.

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EXT. BEACH - DAY
We see her walking along the beach, watching the seagulls, she folds her arms and looks at the sand as she walks.

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EXT. BEACH - DAY - FLASHBACK
We see her parents walking ahead of her talking indistinctly. We see a shaky camera shot running up the the parents. They smile into the camera and continue walking.

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EXT. BEACH - DAY - PRESENT DAY
We see her walking alone again. She sits on the sand watching the waves.

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INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY
GIRL- in casual attire
She walks into the living room and sits on the burgundy couch. She sits upright, then leans a little forward with arms folded on her knees while looking into the sunroom.

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INT. SUNROOM - DAY - FLASHBACK
Her dad plays with the dog on the floor, laughing while her mom sits calmly by a window flooded with light. The dog tries to play with the camera and we hear the girl laugh.

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INT. DINING ROOM - EVENING
She enters the dining room and looks at the birds. She opens the cage hesitantly. The bird comes out calmly, then flies away. She watches, unsure, then the bird comes and lands on top of it's cage, watching her.

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INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT
She walks towards the mirror slowly, looking around the room at her old things. She goes up to the mirror slowly. As she moves closer, we see her eyes shift, almost in fright. We see in the mirror a reflection of herself holding a videocamera. Cut to black.