revised project 1

Rachel Beede
Project #2
Sense of Place: The Never-Changing
2/2/11

I wanted to show a duality of myself in a more concise form with this second edit. I decided to leave out my East/West conflict but I did put it in subtly at the end. I wanted to use mirroring and some repeated actions, sometimes done facing the opposite direction, to show how there are two sides of me that are in conflict, the one being an adult, and the other being a child pretending to be an adult. My past is constantly with me, and I show how childhood affects me with the stuffed animals and pictures of my friends and family. The ending scene with the telephone wires repeats the image from the beginning, showing this as a never-ending cycle. I'm always moving but never changing, and everywhere I feel out of place.
I'm not very good at conveying my ideas, so I know this is definitely a weak point for me, but what I heard in the critique last time really helped. I learned a lot about how to sequence events while I'm filming and while I'm editing. Certain things have to be shot first even if they aren't appearing in that order in the film, and while editing, close-ups need to follow the same actions as the long-shots otherwise it looks off. I still had trouble with getting everything right with the details, but I tried to make it work. I tried to make it seem that when I switched clothes, it was either a different day, or I had changed clothes. Also, I shortened some scenes such as the scene of me in the car so that you couldn't really tell what I was wearing. I took it out of the work scene since I could still see my hair and replaced it with another shot of me looking through the rearview mirror. I know there's still a lot of room for improvement, but I hope that what I did do will be able to better communicate my idea.